Tanka is a classic form of Japanese poetry related to the haiku with five unrhymed lines of five, seven, five, seven, and seven syllables. (5, 7, 5, 7, 7). While I would love to attempt this in English as well, however my first attempt is in Hindi 🙂
When I lyrically recite stories
As usual masttt 🙂
Thank you 🙂
First attempt but wonderful outcome
great I liked it.. 🙂
Thank you Bhavikk, glad you liked it 🙂
Bus dil ko chho gaye. Behad sundar. This is best from what I’ve read on your blog.
And that’s a super compliment, really happy you liked it Saru 🙂
Quite the mystic, especially the last line. 🙂
Well, how do you count syllables in Hindi?
not possible through apps to count the syllables, its same problem with Hindi Haikus Ravish.
Glad you liked it 🙂
I miss watching the horizon and whiling away time 🙁 Wonderful lines. Reminds me of quite a few things that we miss doing in life.
You miss Marine Drive or Kochi fishing nets….I am good till the time i sit by the sea side or river bed…looking aimlessly at it the waves as the sun shines glittering it 🙂
Touching!
Thank you Uppalji 🙂
Truly Classic and heart touching Poetical Lines Shweta! I can just understand the meaning in full even though I’m not so good at Hindi… Well expressed!
Thank you sir, it feels so nice that you attempted to understand the poem….you made my day!!
Nice 🙂 I will surely wait for the English one 😀
Why do I feel like torturing you more with Hindi verses 🙂 ok kidding…words translated for you Teny….
I stand my your side O’sea
With a hope
An attempt to fathom the horizon
Long wait of moments that would never return!
Hope this was easier now 🙂
I did get the meaning, but this one surely gives a better feeling for me 🙂
Very beautifully versed!!
Thank you Deepak ji 🙂
Chah un palon ki joh kabhi lautkar nahi aane wale hai…..beautiful Shweta.
bilkul Somali….moments is what makes life isn’t it 🙂
Beetein hue lamhe, unki yaadein, Bichade dost aur bhoole wadein
Ab aap log itna achcha likhoge toh aur log bhi likhne ko inspire honge na. 🙂
Nice one Shweta. It is very rare that I get to understand a Hindi poem and I am really glad I could understand this one.. It has come out really well 🙂
🙂 oh my you tried is a big thing Vinay, super happy you liked it 🙂
शानदार
Shukriya Yogiji 🙂
Beautifully presented Shweta 🙂
Thank you 🙂
This is so beautiful 🙂
Thanks Purba 🙂
Beautiful!
Thank you Madhusudan 🙂
There are times when you wake up in the morning and feel pensively happy. While you sip tea and go through the poems a friend has written, there is a serene smile….Thank you for the smile, words are not enough to describe how the lines touched me. 🙂
When people ask me what satisfies you after writing, its the creation of course but more its this….a smile I bring to my friend’s face, I feel content 🙂
nice words….reflects a quite and contemplative mood
Thank you Sweta 🙂
नाज़ुक जज़्बा, बेहतरीन अभिव्यक्ति, अभिनन्दन श्वेता !!
Shukriya Amitji, aapki saraahna sarvopariya hai 🙂
khoobsurat shabdo se nirmit khoobsurat rachna, effective
Shukriya Cifar, jab ek kavi se prashansa mile toh baat hi kuch aur hoti hai 🙂
Very beautifully penned Shweta. Wo pal kabhi nahin lautnewaale jo beeth gaye.
sahi kaha Fayaz :). Bus un lamhon ko samet len jab woh paas hain 🙂
You are always a very genius when it comes to writing such kind of poems. Just beautiful….
Thank you Abhijit, really happy you liked it 🙂
Amazing work, love your Hindi expressions 🙂
Thank you Alok, happy happy you liked them 🙂
One of the most beautiful work of yours and splendid Ananya 🙂 Love these lines. They carry the beauty yet so vividly tell volumes of emotions and just flow. Superb job here!
Thanks Shashank, you made my day, well you did tell me its one of my best work par my best is yet to come….my best comes when I am in India 🙂
Beautiful lines!
Thank you Rajeev ji 🙂
Though a greenhorn in hindi, this one’s got me interested.Nicely done Shweta
and am so glad it got you interested, promise stands stronger to my friends on English version of my poem henceforth 🙂
Lovely lines Shweta…so much did it remind me of the beautiful hindi proverb “Umeed pe duniya kayam hai” :’)
bilkul aas chhodni nahi chahiye Maitreni, thanks and super happy you liked it 🙂
Tanka – it sounded like a embroidery style 🙂 here the words are embroidered well. 🙂
🙂 Rightly said Indrani 🙂
Awesome lines! I was reminded of an art form – Thangka! 🙂
Thank you Deepa, is it theTibetan Buddhist painting on cotton, or silk appliqué, usually depicting a Buddhist deity, scene, or mandala.
Ati sundar… Sankshipt panktiyon aur shabdon me dil ko choo lene wali bat kahi hai… Bahut sundar rachna.
Shukriya Ashish, khushi hui ki aapko achhi lagi yeh rachna 🙂
Neat, clean and very descriptive!
Thank you Sunaina, happy you like it 🙂
Beautiful … I have seen Tanka paintings and its as good as those 🙂
Wow…it’s an honor to be compared with amazing art form of Tanka, thanks bestie 🙂
Hindi poetry, this simple and elegance, always touches my heart! Very simple and nice 🙂
ख़ूबसूरती से लिखा है 🙂